social studies: DNA test: yes or no? paragraph draft

paragraph plan

1. state point of view
2. state some positives
3. state at least one possible negative

If I had the choice I would like to take a DNA test as I think that it would be helpful to know more about where i'm from, I would also like to know some facts that I didn't know about myself like where my fathers parents are from or where my grandparents are from in general I know that some people think that people are using DNA tests to steal personal information but I find that unlikely as the DNA testing companies usually aren't part f the government so they couldn't get your personal information, so in conclusion I would take a DNA test as the positives outweigh the possible negatives

presentation

sentences and introduction

importantly, there is no need for talking during classwork

sadistically, the torturer continued his work

before you begin, please put your names on the test

after the heartland war, unwinding was common place

training hard, the woman kept doing her runs in the morning

taking the hint, the students left the angry teacher alone

undaunted by the odds, Connor ran back to the tithe who bit him

blessed by the results, the student was glad

when will we get there, asked the bored children in the back seat

whilst many people were awake, I was fast asleep

q quote/rhetorical question 

t title of book

a author of the book

k key argument

o outline

have you ever thought that abortion should be illegal? in Neal Shushterman's 'Unwind' in a world where instead of abortion you can have your child unwound from the ages 13 to 18 three teens have to stand together in a world that wants to divide them literally and figuratively. a memorable idea from this text is that of abortion/unwinding some memorable parts of the story that use this idea is when we see that there are people helping people stay whole, next when we get to go into a harvest camp where people are unwound, and finally when we go through the unwinding of a character. These are memorable to the reader as these points show that unwinding is common place but there are people who don't agree with the norm

title of book

author of book

key argument

outline

links from peel paragraphs

even more sentences

against the wall, there was no way to escape
un-surprisingly, there were few people doing the work
delighted to have been chosen, the student walked to the whiteboard with pride
who was the murderer?, is one thing you try to figure out in the game of Cluedo

the -ing start
deciding, speaking, seeing, grasping, rising, looking, holding, emerging, taking, signalling, analysing, talking, hopping,

eg talking about military successes one must include Alexander the Great

gasping for air, the diver had to take long deep breathes

looking into the distance, the soldiers looked for the glint of a sniper scope

more sentences and peel

the -ed start
committed, undaunted, determined, forced, gifted, blighted, thrilled, delighted, blessed, overpowered, drafted, bewildered, surprised, drowned,  foreshadowed, haunted, concerned

E.G. thrilled by the score, coach shouted us all macca's

determined to get out of the cave, Lyyr pushed through the pain in his broken ankle

committed to succeeding, the students completed all their work

the W start
who, while, whilst, when, where, what, whereas

E.G. whereas Liz plays netball, I play hockey

whereas many kids like sports, I prefer to stay inside

whilst Nome was sleeping, Kasane was training




PEEL
topic: video games are better than sports

whilst many people believe that sports are better than video games this statement is clearly false as there are many more types of video games than there are for sports



before you start to ask questions, I will explain there's many types of games adventure games puzzle games look at stuff to get a story games action games first person shooters or FPS' role playing games or RPGs so many types of games yet there are very few types of sports. quickly moving on, video games are better than sports because you can be anyone you want you can be a person in a hulking mech or a simple farmer you can help prevent the genocide of an entire planet's population or you could take care of virtual pets, and you can usually nowadays customise your character to look how you want. Compared to sports where you need to constantly train and make sure you aren't injured to play competitively, all you need in video games is some free time everyday and to develop muscle memory and memorise the buttons.

and those are some reasons why video games are better than sports

sentances and example PEEL

the adverb start: quickly, curiously, importantly, firstly, often, remarkably, similarly, significantly, surprisingly, readily, rapidly, interestingly, technically, readily,
comma goes after the adverb EG

surprisingly, Mrs. Handley was on time to class

un-interestingly, most of the class was busy talking instead of listening

technically, the controller had water damage and couldn't function

begin with a preposition:

prepositions are little words indicating movement or position

in, against, before, between, over, behind, within, under, below, at, for, throughout, near, about, prior

E.G. within the hour, 

during the exercise, the students were talking to their friends

before the bell rang, the students began to pack up



Point: state the point you want to make
Evidence: provide evidence to support your point (2-3 sentences)
Explain: explain what your point demonstrated (3-4 sentences)
Link: write a sentence linking to the point (1 sentence) then the next paragraph (one sentence)


Point: everyone knows it's better to read the book than to watch the movie.
Evidence: for example the movie made of 'Wonder' is very different from the book it leaves out lots of information in the book the main teacher is female but in the movie they are male also the camp incident missed out the info about Augie's hearing aids
Explain: this incident made more sense in the book because he was bullied for having his 'lobo ears' which made him look different it didn't make sense to bully him in the movie without them
link: for these reasons the book was clearly better than the movie however you can enjoy the movie without reading the book

floor hockey

1: on a scale of 1-10 rate yourself on how well you participated in the previous lesson 1 being not at all and 10 being the whole time: 5

2: why did you rate yourself the way you did? : because i felt like some of the time i wasn't fully participating

3: what do you think you did well: i think passing we did semi-well

4: what skills did you use to accomplish passing and dribbling: absolutely none

5: what do you think you need to improve upon for next time and what strategies will you use?: i think i need to improve on everything and i think some strategy would do well

migration

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migration is the temporary or permanent movement from one place to another this means that any movement other than a vacation is migration so if you get sent somewhere you are migrating so if you get on a plane because your job is in another country your migrating